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Andrea's post correction

viernes 24 de octubre de 2008

For Javiera

Hi Javiera!
How are you doing (sm = ?)
Do you remember me? We met when I had to do a post about “Something about me”. In that blog (ww = post) I present (t = presented) and (ww = introduced) myself and I could talk about my family, my career ,my projects for the future, , (p) in brief I present (t = presented) and (ww = introduced) my life.
But now I want to know something about you.
I now that your name is Javiera and I now (nn) that you study English Pedagogy (p) but (nn) now I want to know about your life, your hobbies, your family, your projects for the future end (sp) why (sm= do) you study English.
Besides it (ww = that), I (sm) like to say (ww =know) to me (?) (I would like to know) what do you think about my English, because I think your corrections can (t) help me very much to learn English better, and for me (sm = it) is very important (sm = to) learn English very well.
So I hope you are very well and I will be waiting (sm = for) your post.
By (ww = bye)

Felipe's post correction

domingo 26 de octubre de 2008

A letter for to the Trainee Teacher

Hello Javiera, how are you?
Well, I think that the correction about my work in (wp = at) Laboratory in English (wo = English laboratory) is very good, (p) your help in my learning is very important. I have learned a lot for (wp=from) the corrections.
In another context you know a lot of me, because you read all my posts in my blog, (p) on the other hand I don’t know nothing about you. Well, tell me about you (ww = your) hobbies, activities and others things. Tell me about your experience in the role of teacher, your corrections in my posts and the posts by Andrea? (nn)
Also, I want to thank you, (p) for your correctionS, that has (t) helped me a lot,(p) I hope (sm) have learned about, the tenses and order of word (wo = word order).
In conclusion at this time, (p) I am learning a lot and (sm = I) hope that this job can be important to (wp= for) you. Well I hope in the future, your answers about for (?) you.

Kes, Kes, Kes continues!

Well, after Billy buried Kes his life totally changed. Billy was really sad because he had lost something important for him, almost a best friend. Billy would never forgive Jud for killing Kes and their relationship went worse and worse. Once Billy was able to try to give Jud a chance and make up with him, waiting an apology from Jud for being so cruel, but Jud was not able to do such an effort.

After Kes died, Billy discovered that his interest on animals goes beyond a simple hobby of trainee a bird. He decided to work hard and save money to buy a big cage to put in there the ill birds he found and try to help them to recuperate. When they recuperated at all, Billy released them. Billy thought that was great idea, and he decided to do the same not only with birds, but whit all kind of animals like dogs, cats, etc.

On years, Billy became very famous doing this charity for animals, and he started to gain financial backing from many private companies. He was not rich, but he lived in a beautiful house with his family. When Jud and his mother realized that he was in good conditions of life, they went to Billy’s house to try to have any help from him. Even though Billy was really deeply hurt by what they have done with him, he decided to help them without resentment. Then, they all worked together helping animals.

Opinion

I really think that this idea of creating a blog and post every week encourage us to be aware of our writing mistakes and our classmates ones. I think I have improved my writing and the skill of correcting my own mistakes and realizing about others’.

When we started this second semester with the idea of correcting posts of others students from U. de Chile I thought that we will be frequently correcting their post and being helpful for them, but is had been really different. May be we could have more activities correcting their posts and make them realize about that, but I think that when we do something with their posts, they do not know about our corrections.

Correction Post: "Math is not for me!!"

During my whole school time, I always felt that Math wasn’t for me. This subject is compulsory for everybody and everywhere, and even if (sm) go abroad to China I will find it. I couldn’t escape from it. I studied Math for about 12 years at school, and when I entered at the university I find it there too. That was awful for me, and I couldn’t believe it. Then I had to resign myself and (nn) to accept it anyway.

I didn’t like Math because I’m not very good with numbers and solving math problems, (p) and (nn) I always had bad marks in this subject, and my teachers didn’t help me a lot to understand it because they were really bad. I just don’t like it.

I know that math is something which is (nn) present in our daily life, and even if I don’t like it I have to face it anyway.

Original Post

During my whole school time, I always felt that Math wasn’t for me. This subject is compulsory for everybody and everywhere, and even if go abroad to China I will find it. I couldn’t escape from it. I studied it for about 12 years at school, and when I entered at the university I find it here too. That was awful for me, I couldn’t believe it. Then I had to resign myself and to accept it anyway.

I didn’t like Math because I’m not very good with numbers and solving math problems, and I always had bad marks in this subject, I just don’t like it and my teachers didn’t help me a lot to understand because they were really bad.

I know that math is something which is present in our daily life, and even if I don’t like it I have to face it anyway.

Corrections of Andrea's blog.

My favourite moovie (sp)

My favourite movie is "Brave Hart".
I see (wt) this film many many times, but I see (wt) it for the first time almost ten years behind (ww), when premiered it (wo) and (mw).
This story speacks(sp) and (ww) about a historical personage(wwch), sir William Wallace, (p) he was the one who drove Scotland to the freedom.
Brave Hart is a movie based on (mw) true story.
The story is set in (wp) Scotland in (mw) fourteen century wen (sp) Scotland was oppressed (sp) for England and his King, Eduard (sp) I of England. This King was very evil and his (ww) treeting (sp) very bad the people of Scotland. (sm)
The figth (sp) between william (c)Wallece started wen (sp) some soldiers of england (c) kill (wt) his beloved wife, so he kill (wt) all the soldiers and the battle between Scotland and England begins (wf).
In the first time the anger for the murder of his love was the cause of this war, but then he figth (sp) for his countryman.
At the end he was murdered for the King Eduard (sp) I (?) because he was betrayed for some Scotland nobles.
But even so the Scotland warriers (sp) could win the battle and win thir (sp) freedom.
Even much of movie es (?) envented (sp) (?), I like the movie very much.

Corrections of Felipe's blog

Stonehenge

The monument of Stonehenge is a spotted dolomite which when newly quarried is a dark blue speckled whit brilliant (wwch) white stars of quartz (wo). Stonehenge it (sm) is believed that (wo) it (nn) was done into the(nn) Lourdes of(wp) prehistoric Europe.

that (c) the earliest… (sm) has been dated to 7.000 BC and (mw)most recent …(sm) in medieval times suggesting (wf) that the site was already (ww) important 4.000 years before the oldest stone circle (p)

Stonehenge is a place very mythical (wo) (p) an example is in the times of Roman Empire,(p) they believed that Stonehenge was created to(nn) for a ritual important.(wo)

The last excavation at (wp) Stonehenge was in 1964 and the(ww) scientific found more evidence of (sm) ritual practice.

Ww: wrong word
We: wrong expression
Wt: wrong tense
Sp:Spelling
C: Capital letters
P: punctuation
(wo): word order
Wf: wrong form
Nn: not needed
?: not clear
Sm: something missing
Wp: wrong preposition
Wwch: wrong word choice

Writing Improvement

Only Felipe wrote the last post on his blog and I tried to make some corrections on it. After reading his post I could realize that his writing problems have to do with the wrong word order and the spelling mistakes. On his two posts before he made the same kind of mistakes.

For example, in his word order mistakes he says: “the effect greenhouse” instead of the greenhouse effect, or “My personality I will assume that change in the future”, instead of saying “I assume that my personality will change in the future”.

Also he tends to confuse some words which could change the whole meaning of the sentence. For example, he says “warning” instead of warming when he talks about global warming.

I really think that he should read once again his writings before choosing the last he will publish. Sometimes, you can realize about your mistakes when you carefully read what you wrote. In this way while you read you realize about your mistakes.

I believe that when you are recently starting to learn a new language, those kinds of mistakes are made by different kind of students. Some of them realize about their mistakes before others, but while they are practicing they start to be concerned about what are their weaknesses and strengths.

The most difficult things to correct are the tenses, because you may not know the writer’s intension and if he is talking abut the future of the past. By this I mean that some students tend to confuse tenses because they forget about with tense they started to write and they do not make a difference among the past, present and future.